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    COTY

    Assailant -- Year 226

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    "But the dream, the echo, slips from him as quickly as he had found it and as consciousness comes to him (a slap and not the gentle waves of oceanic tides), it dissolves entirely. His muscles relax as the cold claims him again, as the numbness sets in, and when his grey eyes open, there’s nothing but the faint after burn of a dream often trod and never remembered." --Brigade, written by Laura


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    Warship
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    Warship 9+ / 2 o / 1 - = 12
    Post I
    o Good setup of location, though what’s your footing like?
    + Good first attack
    + Good mention of different escape options
    + Good second attack (bone bruises hurt like a mo-fo, my finger agrees with this….)
    + Again, good mention of different escape options

    Post II
    + Like that you don’t forget about the storm
    + Good damage from first attack
    + Good mention of breed and the advantages
    - Hurricane is aiming for barrel, not rump – it would be rump since Warship moved right, but clarify that in your post rather than me figuring it out
    + Good counter attack
    + Good damage from second attack
    o Okay counter attack, but is a head really a likely tool for inflicting damage without just hurting Warships head? Chest makes more sense here

    Hurricane 8+ / 2o / 2- = 12
    Post I
    + Good setup of line of sight
    (- Should include stats in the post -- I’m not counting this one though)
    + Good damage from first attack
    o Want a tiny bit more detail on damage from second attack; where on the side did Warship hit? Middle? Front?
    + Good counter attack
    + Good description of options
    o Would like just a bit more description of positioning before the second attack - I figured it out, but I had to pause and think, and I’m bad at thinking
    + Good description of second attack/possible outcomes

    Post II
    + Good damage to first attack
    - Which way did Hurricane turn? Last I knew he was still facing Warship, so more details here on position
    + Good counter attack
    + Good damage from the second attack
    - Wouldn’t Hurricane be off to Warship’s side after he’s stumbled forward? I’m a little confused about the positioning right before the second attack


    Messages In This Thread
    Warship - by Hurricane - 09-15-2015, 09:07 PM
    RE: Warship - by Warship - 09-15-2015, 09:57 PM
    RE: Warship - by Hurricane - 09-15-2015, 11:34 PM
    RE: Warship - by Warship - 09-17-2015, 06:41 PM
    RE: Warship - by Hurricane - 09-18-2015, 11:39 PM
    RE: Warship - by Kyra - 09-28-2015, 04:03 PM
    RE: Warship - by insane - 09-28-2015, 04:20 PM
    RE: Warship - by Kyra - 09-29-2015, 09:47 AM
    RE: Warship - by insane - 09-29-2015, 10:53 AM
    RE: Warship - by Kyra - 09-29-2015, 02:18 PM
    RE: Warship - by insane - 09-29-2015, 02:37 PM



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