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    COTY

    Assailant -- Year 226

    QOTY

    "But the dream, the echo, slips from him as quickly as he had found it and as consciousness comes to him (a slap and not the gentle waves of oceanic tides), it dissolves entirely. His muscles relax as the cold claims him again, as the numbness sets in, and when his grey eyes open, there’s nothing but the faint after burn of a dream often trod and never remembered." --Brigade, written by Laura


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    first attempt
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    unsuccessful.
    the clues to the falls and to shatter me were acceptable (but a bit vague), but the clues to nairne were not strong enough.

    You need to include clues to the actual name of the horse you are stealing.
    some of the clues you had for Nairne were actually clues for record keeping, south carolina and native americans. You're not stealing a horse named Record Keeping, South Carolina or Native American.

    If you had wanted to use Thomas Nairne as the main clue for Nairne, including things like (explicitly) Scots trader, first Indfiana Agent, the Carolinas, his birthday, would have been more likely to make it a success. If you wanted to use the scottish origin of the name, you need to be more explicit,. like putting in the steal somewhere the phrase "from the alder-tree river" or other iteration of it.


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    first attempt - by Killdare - 06-08-2015, 05:02 PM
    RE: first attempt - by Killdare - 06-12-2015, 03:52 PM
    RE: first attempt - by kahzie - 06-14-2015, 02:51 PM
    RE: first attempt - by Killdare - 06-14-2015, 02:59 PM



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