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To my dear Chambermaid, Astri - Gallows - 09-15-2015 I'm so pleased that you have agreed to play a little game with me. I have no intention of seriously maiming or harming you, but I hope you'll try to beat me, as I will certainly do for you. Let's say the following terms shall be ours; As many days as needed between posts (this is for practice after all) but we shall each try to make our responses in less than three days. Two posts each, one attack in each. I shall suppress my mind reading since it seems terribly unfair to know what you plan to do, and also not very useful for improving my skills. Any other traits or skills allowed. The winner has to say that the Chamber drools. Okay, just kidding... ![]()
RE: To my dear Chambermaid, Astri - Astri - 09-21-2015 What Is An Ocean But A Multitude Of Drops It seemed like it was too soon to be back on the battlefield. She’d given birth, for the first time, and suddenly she knew what that empty ‘ache’ was. The absence of Kraz pushing against her ribs causes her to feel something she’s never felt before - loss. She still doesn’t fully understand it, she can’t quite put her finger on it, but Kraz has become like a ghost at her side. Her firstborn, and a son at that. He was perfect in her eyes. She tries to push these thoughts from her mind and instead focus on what was going on around her. Her opponent, Gallows, arrives in due time and Astri is a little taken aback. Her wingspan was impressive, and when she beat those dual appendages against the wind, the tough green mare could feel the breeze coming from the action. She’d never battled a gifted horse, and this was sure to be a fight she could remember, or even tell Kraz. “Focus, Astri.” She commands herself, and she watches as the other mare contemplates before bursting forward in surprising speed, one wing extended to create drag. Gallows is heading towards her left side, so the mantis girl spreads her hind legs and digs in, knowing she cannot avoid the attack. The mare rams, her front legs sending a reverberating shock through Astri’s ribcage, but she clenches her jaw and absorbs the impact, letting her head snake to the left so she can lash out and hopefully grab on to the extended wing. It’s a wild thought, but Astri reasons that if she can injure the wing, it might deter Gallows from taking flight and landing an aerial attack. Her yellowed teeth snap shut but she hasn’t much time, as Gallows is quickly retreating. The green mare cannot see where the other is heading, so she reacts naturally and backs away, turning as quickly as she can manage to face her opponent. It would be wise to keep Gallows in her line of sight, and Astri isn’t willing to risk anything in this skirmish. astri yule x astrah To my dear Chambermaid, Astri - Gallows - 09-22-2015 ![]()
RE: To my dear Chambermaid, Astri - Astri - 09-24-2015 What Is An Ocean But A Multitude Of Drops Gallows is an adept fighter, and Astri reveles in the challenge of the new opponent. She wonders (as the soreness begins to creep along her ribcage) if she’s finally found her calling in life. It seemed like the silver tongue was no path for the green girl. She enjoys the instant gratification of fighting, of how instead of stepping on toes, one can simply rip apart flesh. She grins as Gallows draws in her single wing, and the scarlet indication of Astri’s successful hit fuels her in this battle. Gallows is quick to retaliate, barreling ahead at Astri’s exposed left shoulder with the intention of wounding her. Thankfully, she’s got the advantage of seeing her coming so she makes up her mind quickly. Gallows could land a blow on the same side again, essentially crippling Astri’s left front, or the jade mare could take defensive action. She turns to her right, as quickly as she can manage (which, with her previous injury isn’t as quick as she was hoping) and Gallow’s blow lands along her shorter ribs, managing to render Astri’s flesh bloody with her sharp incisors. Astri squeals and throws a low-flying buck, hoping that since the two are close and tangled, she may strike Gallows in the chest or front legs. Astri puts what energy she has saved into this move and limps forward, knowing that for now, the fight is over. astri yule x astrah OOC: Yay!!!! This was fun <3 RE: To my dear Chambermaid, Astri - Kyra - 11-16-2015 @[Gallows] and @[Astri] - sorry this took so long! Winner: Gallows Gallows Post I + Good description of Gallow’s size and build, advantages and disadvantages - Set the weather, landscape, etc. These things will affect how you can see and move, and if you are suddenly fighting in say the Jungle instead one day, that will really matter o Pay particular attention to the way you position your attacks. Telling me that your wing is unfurled completely right in front of Astri is really helpful, but I would have liked to see that explained in the attack. I had to read all the way through and then double back, because it took a while for me to have a full understand of exactly what was happening o I’d like a little more (not a lot, but a little more) about what exactly this attack is intended to do. Not necessarily the muscle groups, but more about how that bruise could make it harder for Astri to put all her weight on her front, making buck’s harder. That sort of stuff. Post II + Good damage to her attack o More details in your attack. I get the attack, but again, what kind of damage are you really causing? What muscles are you bruising? Not necessarily the muscle names, but more about how those muscles can effect Astri’s movement. I don’t think you need a ton more, it’s nice not reading a book for each battle post, but I would spend a little more time on the attack description/possible outcomes. Astri Post I - Gallows doesn’t use her wings, except to spread one out during the attack, so there’s really no wind or anything for Astri to be taken aback by here, and it’s borderline power playing (minimal, and it doesn’t really affect the battle, but it does give Astri knowledge earlier than she should have had it) - Gallows is heading toward Astri’s right, not left o We obviously aren’t that realistic here, but there are certain things that we can keep that way, and no horse is going to stand there, legs basically poised to be broken, while a horse barrels straight at them. There were quite a few options for at least a partial dodge, and choosing not to move at all was not the best option Astri had o I like the idea behind the attack. Biting won’t do much damage, so I’d mention that, but you could leave a bruise on a wing if you snagged the right part of it. However, this doesn’t get a plus because the positioning is wrong – turning her head to the left, Astri would just be biting at air - Be careful about interpreting too much into what the other person is writing/being very clear with your own language – Gallows is only backing away a bit, and says she stays close by. You say things like quickly and that you can’t see Gallows, but these conclusions aren’t necessarily true. It’d be more accurate to say that you aren’t sure where Gallows is heading, so you back away to try and put some space between the two of you, or something to that affect. Post II - Again, watch the positioning. Gallows is on Astri’s right, not left - Horses teeth are not that sharp – they tear grass, not flesh. Particularly along Astri’s side, which is where I think the attack hit, Gallows wouldn’t really be able to grab anything here. She might scrape Astri’s side, certainly, but it wouldn’t be more than a minor abrasion. Bloody implies more of a serious injury. o Counter attack is pretty realistic, but a little more detail would be good. It may be the last post, but still detail what’s going on, what a hit to the chest could do to Gallows, etc. Particularly, it would make it a more effective attack if you were specific with the buck, saying it’s also slightly to the side. Astri probably couldn’t kick straight back to hit anything, giving their position. But she could angle herself just a bit, throwing one leg out to the side instead. Something like that, anyway. |